My Recently Finished Series ... Feedback Welcomed!!
Life In Balance Series
I recently completed a series of three paintings exploring a concept of balance in life.
The three pieces are titled:
1. Teetering Man
2. Brittle Back
2. She Brings Me Balance
I enjoy art that attempts to portray the experiences, morals, values, and relationships we find in everyday life. I also like abstract pieces that warp or bend away from reality. So this series was an effort to merge these two different genres to express a particular thought. Unfortunately, my biased perspective makes it difficult to tell if objectively I accomplish the intended effect. For this reason I'm displaying these pieces here. Comments and suggestions please?!
I like these, technically they are great and I like the texture and color and content. However, the three don't necessarily tell me a story in any way. Going by the titles, the top image is supposed to communiate unbalance and the 3rd is supposed to communicate balance, correct? If this is so, I'm afraid that is lost on me. They look like three very good exploratons of light and shadow and pattern, and they do all speak to me about pieces becoming part of a whole - but as a series, for me, they don't communicate any process or change in terms of interpersonal relationship.
Now, I'm no art scholar, and I may have just missed your point completely, in which case I apologize. But to my eye you have succeeded masterfully at creating the rhythmic, warped abstract series with familliar shapes and textures, I love the three together for that and they are a natural set and complement. However I am completely missing the human relationship bit - the broken block in the center image obviously leans toward some kind of event or damage, but the other two just don't fill in the story gaps for me.
And again, this may be my shortcoming - I may just be missing something.
I think you're right. Seeing it from your perspective I can see a disconnect between the title and the image. But its not so much a storyline as my as three thoughts portrayed in a certain style. Still, the third seems the most problematic even in that case because I can see that maybe in my effort to create two figures with one assisting the other I should've emphasized more balance across the whole image. Thank you so much for your comments. It's what I'm looking for. I like to think of all my works as constantly in progress so maybe another effort would be worth it.
I appreciate your response - lots of people ask for critique and then just waste time being defensive. Your reaction here tells me a lot about you as an artist. A lot of good things about you as an artist.
To put it succinctly, there is an element of tension missing. You don't need to be all literal, either. You can do this beautifully without actual figures. I think if you can introduce tension into each of your compositions - 1.unbalance, 2.chaos, 3.stability. (my interpretation) Find a way to show that with these wonderful geometric forms. I just want to reach in there an push some of them around and show you what I mean, but I think you understand. I look forward to seeing more of your work!
Thanks Cynthia. Your impulse to kinda fix it though is one thing I was hoping to accomplish. The idea of wanting to trigger that impulse to move stuff in the painting around is something I'd like to keep but I absolutely want to also address the defects in getting the whole concept across. Now its a matter of figuring out a technique to actually accomplish one without losing the other. You guys are wonderful for taking the time. Believe me it helps.