I plan on entering a competition that is inspired by specific areas around my local town. Since I do not live in Middle Earth it’s not my usual style! I would love any feedback or even ruthless critique about how to improve this. It’s an ink wash with ink dipping pen details.
I like your style a lot - great softness and impressionism. Nice, gentle use of color
I am a bit confused by the foreground/lower part of the painting though. I cannot tell if the boys are crouching in water or sitting on a shoreline? I think the foreground needs more detail and tightening to give a stronger context to the scene.
I would also smooth out the boy's shirt on the left - kind of looks like a Hawaiian shirt - unless that's what you were going for. I also can't tell exactly which way the sunlight is coming from - maybe a bit more shadow on the boys to make that sunlight really pop and give it direction.
Thank you Chance that is very helpful! The boys are sitting in dappled shade with the sun probably right over head in my reference so that makes the funky shapes and lack of a distinctive light source. I can definitely work on the foreground.
I love the subtlety and play with light but I do find the sharp edging of the boy on the right a bit too pronounced. Just one suggestion from a photographer! And good luck if you enter the competition.
Thank you Justin. I do struggle with sharp lines as I am more of a drawer than a water colourist. I think in this case I better leave it rather than mess it up but should definitely keep in mind for future.
Thank you everyone for your comments and support, I did go ahead and darken/intensify the foreground, just a little. I started a new thread with the updated image as I don't see a way to add an image to this thread.
new thread with comparison image: