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Jon Woodhams

1 Year Ago

Haiku

I've had such a great time participating in the word-oriented threads here (Linked Words, Acronym Game, and Six Word Stories), and there's been such a great response to them, that I thought there might be room for one more. Haiku is a Japanese poetry form that is tightly structured with three lines: The first line has five syllables, the second line has seven, and the third line has five. Like this:

Just five syllables
(first line), then seven (next line),
then five more--you're done!

OR

How about Haiku?
Five/seven/five syllables.
Poems that don't need rhymes.

Or

Music soothes the soul.
Art engages the spirit.
Why not try them both?

A lot of Haiku poems I've read employ a subtle wit or sense of humor, but I don't think they have to. Give it a try and have fun!

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A new can of Spam
Pink gelatinous meat blob
I ain't eating that

 

Jon Woodhams

1 Year Ago

Love it! :)

 

:: curtsy ::

Choosing employment
"Do art" said no one ever
I should have listened

 

Shawn O'Brien

1 Year Ago

Keep it simple Stu
Let the great ideas Flo
Quick and content Rich

 

Jon Woodhams

1 Year Ago

Discussion forums
are not the place for haiku!
Art and words don't mix.

Of course I'm kidding.
After all, I started this.
I can't turn back now.


 

A fact in my house
Pet hair found in the kitchen
Is a condiment

 

Jack Torcello

1 Year Ago

Liz Truss for P M?
I don't think so any more
She's gone: close the door!

 

David Manlove

1 Year Ago

Why Five, Seven, Five?
I do not understand it.
Call me a numbskull.

 

Jon Woodhams

1 Year Ago

Why Five, Seven, Five?
A mystery, it is true...
How it's always been.

 

Jack Torcello

1 Year Ago

Why iambic pentameter?
Why Alexandrine rhyme-schemes?
Why Limericks?

Write an Alexandrine Haiku Limerick anybody?! :)

 

L A Feldstein

1 Year Ago

Bright sunshine abounds
Summer flowers soon grow tall
Bees gather pollen


What's in a picture
Can you see the spirit there
Or linger awhile

 

Shawn O'Brien

1 Year Ago

Laughter lifted me
from the depths of broken dreams
Friends, dear treasured Friends

 

Jon Woodhams

1 Year Ago

Can I forget you,
even now that you are gone?
I still dream of you.

 

L A Feldstein

1 Year Ago

Words appeared, useless
Reading now seemed tiresome
Sleep and dreams beckoned

 

David Manlove

1 Year Ago

Because I kissed you
I am forever broken
Never again love

 

Becky Titus

1 Year Ago

Where is my pencil?
I need to make a drawing
And color it pink.

 

Jon Woodhams

1 Year Ago

Wrote a poem today,
the best I've ever written.
Now I can't find it.

 

Five, seven and five
Is English language haiku
Not so in Japan

 

Jon Woodhams

1 Year Ago

I didn't know that, Susan. What is the pattern there?

 

Jon Woodhams

1 Year Ago

Two roads to follow:
I chose the one less traveled,
changing everything.

(With apologies to Robert Frost!)

 

L A Feldstein

1 Year Ago

Clever Tom spoke out
Attracting much attention
But sadly all left

 

Jon, there are actually quite a few rules to writing a real haiku besides the misguided syllable counting (which tends to make them too long by Japanese standards), which is a far cry from what we're doing here, and despite its simplicity (or perhaps because of it) it's actually considered fairly difficult to do well... and with good reason.

These sites will explain it better than I can without writing a missive:

https://www.nahaiwrimo.com/why-no-5-7-5
https://thehaikufoundation.org/some-thoughts-on-line-and-syllable-count-in-english-language-haiku/

And if you want to get really serious about it:
https://www.tofugu.com/japan/haiku/

 

Jon Woodhams

1 Year Ago

Thanks! I'll check them out.

I've actually always liked the sparseness and discipline of having to work within the 5/7/5 parameters. But I'll be interested to see what the next levels are.

In the meantime, I'm thoroughly enjoying the thread, both reading others' posts and getting to write my own.

 

Saskia Vaughan

1 Year Ago

computer light room
publishing my photographs
wishing they would sell

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My attempt at something a bit more traditional in the technically required nature theme (and 5-7-5 cuz English, but I did try for more brevity)

At morning's first light
the garden begins to sing
as day comes to life

 

L A Feldstein

14 Days Ago

Where is everyone?
Alone in the quiet morn
Patiently waiting

 

Shaolan Sung

14 Days Ago

children's hospital
shattered under Kyiv's blue sky
thrilling the looney

 

L A Feldstein

13 Days Ago

The fox and raccoon
Seen in the backyard last night
Suburban wildlife

 

L A Feldstein

12 Days Ago

The plants are wilting
As the heat wave continues
Waiting for the rain

 

L A Feldstein

11 Days Ago

Last night's gentle rain
Perked up the drooping garden
Until heat returns

 

L A Feldstein

10 Days Ago

The map showed the way
If only they'd seen the trail
And so they got lost

 

Carmen Hathaway

10 Days Ago

 

The Everywhere Map
Gets them going madly off
In all directions.

 

L A Feldstein

9 Days Ago

The forecast of rain
Much needed; never arrived
The lawn turned brown

 

L A Feldstein

8 Days Ago

Please wake up she called
And now the house was empty
Everyone was gone

 

Michelle Smith

7 Days Ago

Haven't posted poems
--for far too long!-- here I am
with my new haiku

 

L A Feldstein

7 Days Ago

The oppressive news
Overwhelming the airwaves
Retreat to nature

 

Shaolan Sung

7 Days Ago

soccer ecstasy
melted dense news of the week
slept at 2:40

 

L A Feldstein

7 Days Ago

The lies were rampant
No one cared to learn the truth
Facts had disappeared

 

L A Feldstein

6 Days Ago

Wren's song filled the air
He's looking for a partner
To share his new home

 

Carmen Hathaway

6 Days Ago

 

Tic-tac-toe is yet
Another game of chance that’s
Hope for the masses.
 

 

Michelle Smith

5 Days Ago

If I get ready
by the early afternoon
I could go Doordash!

 

L A Feldstein

5 Days Ago

If I can wake up
I could go for a slow walk
Listening to the birds

 

L A Feldstein

4 Days Ago

If we sing along
In beautiful harmony
Will things get better?

 

Shaolan Sung

4 Days Ago

silicone molds, nice
silicone lips, butt, boobs...
sad womanhood. Sigh--

 

Carmen Hathaway

3 Days Ago

 

The blistered fish lips
Smooth faces and wrinkled necks
Modern horror shows.

 

L A Feldstein

3 Days Ago

If I wear make up
Will the wrinkles disappear
Time is folding in

 

Carmen Hathaway

3 Days Ago

 

Advertisers hawk
Slather topical creams, oils
And be young again!
 


Makeup smears onto
pillows, washcloths and partners
A new ball o’wax.
 

 

Shaolan Sung

3 Days Ago

dark spots blooming here
leave them or get whitening cream
and dalmatian be?

 

L A Feldstein

3 Days Ago

All the hurtful things
Come back haunting me at night
Far away; long past

Still a pain lingers
Sneaking from a dark corner
Peeking from hallways

You? Where are you now?
I have tried banishing you
Success is fleeting

© L. A. Feldstein 2024

 

L A Feldstein

2 Days Ago

The straw hats shielded
From the sun's relentless glare
Their work continued

 

L A Feldstein

1 Day Ago

Quiet and pensive
Listening to the cicadas
Watching the bees feast

 

L A Feldstein

9 Hours Ago

Looking all around
He realized he was alone
Deserted, again.

 

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